Rewrite as an animation, example included on the cover he’s playing with a shoe
no need to talk about the back cover – sorry, the way the pdf is set up is confusing. It’s supposed to be
‘interactive’, in that you can make it full screen and tab through and see the double page spreads, but that
means having to see the front and back covers at the same time
you have to try to write what should be moving, not exactly what the words say. Also, p.6 + 7 is a double
spread, so it would need to be animated as essentially one page (for example) “A boy throws a ball at Wally,
who hits it back with a big smile on his face. Other children are playing in the water around them)
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